Monday, May 11, 2015

The Ashen Oak Part 3 (Chris)

Hi all! I hope everyone's had a great semester and finished up well!

Some quick notes to set up this chapter:

--I went back and incorporated the hog Orwell into the story. He is one of Oddy's pets who Oddy sends to keep an eye on Edith when she takes his boat. He will serve as Edith's grumpy animal companion throughout, functioning as something of an extension of Oddy's own personality.

--I also gave Wernher a pistol, as per suggestions. He's mostly kept it concealed and Edith naturally doesn't know what it is, thinking it to maybe be a knife.

Regarding this chapter, I would like some advice about Wernher's treasure hunt. Do you like the idea of his hunting for one of the Crown Jewels or would you like the salvage to be something more mundane? Are there any parts of the chapter where you think I should slow down the pace? Also I was intending this excursion to slowly break the ice between Edith and Wernher, do you think it works as is or would you like to see it later in the story? I was trying to balance Edith's wanting to get away to keep looking for Anja with her refusal to tell Wernher about her since she doesn't trust him. As always, thanks a bunch for leaving any suggestions, and I can't wait to see what everyone's working on for your next chapters!


Chapter 5—Kings and Queens

            The deeper we ventured into the London Ruins the more ominous they became. I had always held onto the hope that the Ruins would be something that looked scarier at a distance than they actually were up close—just a menacing arrangement of water and old stone. But once you were actually within the dead city it became something far more sinister.
The waters of the Ruins were deep, very deep. Staring into those depths was much like staring into the black of a clouded midnight. At first I thought it was just a trick of the huge towers’ shadows over the water, but those shadows only painted over darkness that was already there.
            As we clattered over the paths that Wernher told me were once called motorways, I peered down into the black depths and clutched to the edge of the cart. The blackness scared me. I was used to the green—the bits of plants and algae that could survive the hungry rains lived in the Floods around Rol. I wasn’t accustomed to water being dark as night. My mind churned with thoughts of the old husks of life that would surely be at the bottom of this great lake that was the London Ruins. Spoilt skeletons and belongings of the people of the world before.
            “We’re about twenty meters above the old roads right now,” Wernher said, keeping his eyes on the twisting path. “You never know what you might find down there.”
             London Ruins was a terrifying mix of impossibilities. Impossible heights, as the skeletal towers rose all around up through the clouds, farther than my eyes could even look. They were like the ancient fingers of some giant out of Anja’s stories—fingers of a great hand that threatened to crush us and drag us down into those impossible depths.
“So, Edith, what brings you to London?” Wernher scratched his chin while steering the trike around a bend in the road. “I must say that you looked lost earlier.”
            I rubbed my hand along Orwell’s bristly back. The hog still hadn’t moved since we got on the trike, his eyes stuck to Wernher like boots stuck in the mud. Not to say my eyes had done much different. Even as I looked at the waters and the towers, my eyes always flashed back to the weapon Wernher carried at his side. I was only waiting for Wernher to trip up and then I’d make my escape with Orwell. “I was out walking my hog.”
            Wernher laughed. “I cannot doubt that. Not all. I saw the last little bits of your boat washing down the Thames.”
            “Thames?” Another of his funny words?
            Wernher tilted his head. “The river that runs through London to the coast. Surely you knew that?”
            I shrugged and munched on another round of bread. It was odd; the bread tasted very good, but my stomach was starting to feel strange. It rather hurt, but not like the constant ghostly burn between daily meals. It was as if the bread were trying to get out from the inside.
            “So why is a young woman such as yourself alone in London?”
            I yawned then burped. The latter was something I had not done in a long, long while. You had to have food in your belly in order to burp.
            “Fine,” Wernher said, “I suppose I can’t coax you with any more of food, but I’d be willing to tell you about myself. A give-and-take, you might say.”
            “I’m listening.”
            “Good. Well, is there anything you would like to know about me? Such as where I come from?”
“Not really.”
Wernher almost looked disappointed. “Oh. Well, I can tell you I come from across the sea. A land called Österreich, actually.”
“How nice.”
“Look, Edith, I’m just trying to be friendly.” Wernher shifted in his seat. “So where are you from?”
“I’m from here, like you say.”
“Do you have a family, or have you been surviving all by yourself?”
“I have a big family.” I leaned toward him, folding my hands across my knees. “Ten big brothers who don’t need boats and who break the stones of the London Ruins with their bare hands.”
Wernher chuckled. “You don’t trust me because trust is earned. I understand.”
*
Wernher pulled the trike under an overhang from one of the ruins that looked the least like it was in the process of falling and crushing us. He reached into one of his boxes and produced a small can and some kind of fabric. He rubbed the fabric together and a flurry of sparks fell over the can. The waxy surface blazed to life, and I couldn’t help but stare deep into the nearly magical sight.
“Don’t get too close or you’ll burn your eyebrows off,” Wernher said while poking through another box. “I did the same once.”
“Do you have a lot of things like this where you come from?”
“Hmm? Oh, yes. Of course.” He fanned his hand over the flames. “This is nothing.”
Wernher hung a metal kettle over the fire. I had only heard of such things through stories. Some of the older people in the village remembered having them as children, but that was long ago, and even then they were rare. They used to make something called tea. But now they were all rusted and broken and no one could remember how to make tea.
“I hope you don’t take tea with sugar,” Wernher said, pouring water from the kettle. “We’re a bit short on that lately.”
Tea. My heart raced in my chest. It was not often one got to taste something right out of the stories. Wernher noticed and poured some into a small ceramic cup and handed it to me. The white of the cup was slightly faded and there were tiny cracks running down it from the golden-ringed lip. A bed of some kind of sediment lined the bottom and bits gradually floated up.
After Wernher had taken a sip of his own cup, I raised the cup to my mouth and drank. I spit it out in a second. My mouth was afire.
Wernher laughed. “Careful, careful. It’s hot.”
Water leaking from my eyes and nose against my will, I took a small sip. It was still hot, but I could manage. The tea tasted very bitter, but it lacked the sour taste of any of the plants that managed to grow out in the floods. I noticed Orwell snuffle over to the spit tea on the ground. He licked at the liquid then snorted and walked off. I ran my hands along the sleeves of my raincoat, brushing off the water.
“I know you don’t trust me yet, but there has to be something you could tell me about why you are here. It would help to know which direction I should take you on the trike.”
I paused, taking in a deep breath. “I’m looking for something.”
            “Perhaps you could tell me what that might be? Perhaps I could help?”
            I watched the water drip from my fingertips down to the broken ground. Then I held my hands up to the tiny fire can, enjoying the heat wash over my skin. The fire was nice—it reminded me of being home with Pa. I assumed Wernher was thinking the same thing, but he would find that I would not be so easily tricked into a false feeling of security.
            “Tea is made from plants, no?”
“Yes. Dried and ground.” Wernher sighed and then finished his cup and poured himself some more. “We get it from very far away. All the way on the other side of the world.”
“And just how do you do that?”
“Boats, of course. Big ships that can weather the open seas.”
“And that’s how you got here.”
Wernher smiled. “Yes, actually. My uncle is the captain of a good ship. It helps us greatly to find new markets for trading.”
“Do you like being a trader?”
Nodding, he said, “Of course. I get to meet all kinds of new and interesting people. And the money doesn’t hurt. Tell me, Edith, have you ever heard of the treasure in London?”
“Unless, there’s some food hidden around here, I’m not really interested.”
Wernher laughed. “I don’t think you’d want to eat any food that’s been sitting here a hundred years even if we were able to find some. I’m speaking about real treasure. The kinds of things that outlast the kings and rulers.”
“How is that treasure going to help me?”
“Well, I am a trader by trade, as I said. You help me find some treasure, and I’ll make sure you get paid in food and whatever else you need. You’ve already eaten quite a bit.”
I glared. “So you gave me food because you expect me to pay it back?”
Wernher shook his head. “Of course not, of course not. That was simply a taste of the rewards that wait for you if you can help me.”
“And why can’t you just do this yourself?”
“Where’s the fun in that?” Grinning, Wernher puffed out his chest a bit. “Every great hero needs to have a beautiful woman by his side when he goes treasure hunting. An achievement is nothing if it’s done alone. That’s just how it is. And I don’t think my uncle or any of my cousins would really work.
“I just look at you and I say to myself, ‘Wernher, this is a girl who will appreciate true adventure and the joy of the finding.’ It’s rather rare anymore, you know. Everyone’s so practical with surviving and getting by.”
I snorted. “You might find that I’m the same way.”
“And you might find that you’re not. So what do you say?”
I leaned against Orwell and pondered, having another taste of the tea. I didn’t know what Wernher had planned, but then neither did he have any idea about my plans. Wherever he wanted to go, I could follow him, and then lose him when it suited me.
“Okay.”
Wernher clapped his hands together and beamed. “Wunderbar!”
*
The old stone skeleton that Wernher called the Tower of London wasn’t what I was expecting. The name implied some kind of largeness that the real structure simply didn’t have. I was expecting some massive creation like an enormous arm rising out of the earth, punching through the dark clouds. The truth was merely four round stony buildings sticking out from the water at the Big River’s edge like piles of silt.
“You said the treasure is in there? You do realize it’s underwater.”
Wernher laughed. “It used to be in there back before all of this. Your government moved the treasure when the waters started rising in the Thames. They didn’t want the fancy property to get swept away with the fish.”
“Where’d they move them?”
“They scattered the hoard. Some stayed in London, some didn’t. I happen to know where one is. Kept safely in plain sight, as you say.” Wernher pointed beyond the Tower of London. Several ruined husks made up the backdrop, their metal and stone melting into the gray mists.
“Our treasure’s hidden on the thirty-sixth floor.”
“How do you know that? And how do you someone hasn’t already taken it? It’s been a long time.”
“It has, hasn’t it? Well, let’s make a wager. If the treasure is still in the tower I win, if someone made off with it in the last century, you win. How about it?
“What do I get if I win?”
“If you win, you get to keep all the treasure we find.”
I opened my mouth to protest, but Wernher burst out laughing.
“A joke,” he said, struggling to form his words amid a tumble of giggles. “If you win I’ll let you drive the trike. I’ll even let you look through my wares and see if you’d like to take anything back to wherever you are going.”
“And if you win?”
“A kiss?”
“Soak off.”
“Don’t worry. Only joking. Again. No, if I win I’ll be happy enough with our find. I won’t need any extra reward.” Wernher flashed a sheepish smile. “But you can still kiss me if you want.”
I grunted and made sure I still had the mirror shard in my pocket. My mother would keep me safe if it came down to it.
“The swine is going to have to stay here, of course,” Wernher said, stopping the trike as close to the submerged base of the building as he could get. He stepped off the trike onto the road. “It is a good thing that your government decided to build these reinforced motorways back in the day. Before then there was nothing but surface roads that are drowned fifteen meters below us.”
Orwell trotted to the edge of the motorway and snorted, as if he knew Wernher had been talking about him.
“How’s your swimming?” Wernher asked me. He took off his shirt and the weapon pouch affixed to his belt and tied them up into a tarp bundle, which he strung across his shoulders.
“Good enough.” I took my raincoat and stashed it in one of the boxes of Wernher’s trike.
“But not great?” Wernher narrowed his eyes.
            “I’ll manage.” I walked over to Orwell and waited for Wernher to jump into the water. If I timed this right I reasoned that I might be able to take Orwell and the trike and get away from here.
“It wouldn’t be very gallant of me to let you risk sinking. Why don’t you take my hand and we will swim over together?”
“I’m fine.”
“But I insist.”
Reluctant, I extended my hand to Wernher.
“We’ll jump in three, okay? One. Two. Three!”
My muscles locked up the second I hit the water. The deep was very cold, even colder than the main flow of the Big River. A chill ran up my skin to my head. Wernher pulled me with a grip like iron to the nearest entrance to the building. Slipping and shivering, I crawled up into the opening as Wernher hoisted himself up behind me.
The inside of the tower was broken and smashed. Any glass that still looked like glass hung in yellow shards like angry teeth from the walls. Metal branches stuck out of the floors and ceilings. Some of the floors had completely collapsed, leaving gaping holes from which water poured in scattered falls.
Wernher pulled a small object out of his tarp bundle. There was a click and light shot out like a tiny fire, its glow bouncing against the wall. “We’re going need to climb the stairs. Be careful. This place is old and could give way at any moment.”
            I nodded and we made our way to the staircase. Old and could give way at any moment didn’t really describe the stairs. Ancient and gave way at a moment long ago was probably more apt.
            Wernher scanned the staircase and hissed something under his breath. “We’re going to have to go slowly. Just take it one stair at a time.”
            “Why don’t we just turn back?”
            Wernher draped his arm over my shoulders. “Come on, we’re already here. Do this for me. I could be one of the richest traders ever with a find like this. And you could eat for many lifetimes.”
            “Fine,” I said, removing his arm, “but you can go first.”
            “Of course. That’s what a hero would do isn’t it?” Wernher looked up the spiraling staircase that had mostly spiraled into the water. “Yeah…”
            He stepped onto one of the metal stairs and then another. The stairs were rusted by the water and groaned with each step.
            “Follow me. It’s not so bad.”
            Cringing, I placed my weight onto the first step. It was sturdier than I thought, but I would have to be careful not to slip over the slick surface.
            As we made our way up floor after floor, I felt my eyes spinning, especially whenever I had the misfortune of looking down. I wanted nothing more than total silence to concentrate on this mad chore, but Wernher would have none of it.
             “What’s your favorite kind of food?” Wernher asked, jumping across a section of collapsed stair.
            I tried not to lose the food in my stomach as I sized up the gap. “Bread.” Up until today I would have said mushrooms by default. The fish and frog I’d been lucky enough to eat had never tasted particularly good. They had swallowed up too much of the hungry water.
            “See? You’ve gotten something out of our meeting already! My favorite food is schnitzel.” Wernher paused. “It’s a flat piece of animal meat, breaded and fried. Very good. Not that I can get very much like that out here. But when I go back home that is going to be one of the first things that I eat.”
            A groan, a creak, and a crash. All in the space of a breath.
            The next thing I knew Wernher was plummeting through the stairs. I pitched forward and grabbed his hand, the stairs digging into my arms and knees.
            A trickle of blood ran down the side of Wernher’s face as he dangled from my arms above the fallen stairs. He rocked back and forth and then finally grabbed hold of a secure piece of metal and hauled himself back to his feet.
            “Thanks for the save.”
            I nodded, silently cursing myself for missing the opportunity to be rid of him. Why hadn’t I just let him fall?
            Wernher laughed and clanged his foot against the metal staircase. “I should have known. The path to the treasure is always filled with danger. One of the first things you get used to in a job like mine.”
            Heart racing, I was panting, trying to catch my breath.
            “Anyway, as I was saying before the stairs’ rude interruption, you really should come and visit Österreich some time. It’s a wonderful place. You should see the great Alps. Truly a splendid sight, especially when the sun plays over the snow just right, they blaze red like fire.”
            “The Sun?” I asked, gasping. Climbing the stairs felt like a day of running back and forth between Rol and Oddy’s house.
            Wernher seemed startled for a moment, and then he regained his composure. “Yes, the climate is a bit different than England’s. Sometimes we have clearer days. Well, enough of that, we’re here.”
            I looked out at the floor around us. It looked the same as all the other floors. “How do you know?”
            “I counted. We started out on the fifth floor. Four floors were beneath the water line. We’ve climbed thirty floors since. Thus, the thirty-sixth floor. According to the stories, of course.” He grinned. “That last bit was a joke.”
            He led the way through a maze of nearly collapsed hallways. More sticks of metal protruded from the walls and there was a strong smell of rot. A layer of slime that had not quite become mud covered the floor. “I committed all of this to memory based on the old maps.”
            “And how did you get these maps?”
            “Well, let’s just say that one of my ancestors was involved in moving the treasure.”
“You keep saying it’s a treasure, but what kind of treasure?”
“One of the artifacts called the Crown Jewels.”
“Crown? Isn’t that something for kings or queens?”
Wernher frowned, and when he spoke there was a growl in his voice. “And what? Do you see a king or queen around? What about a prince or a princess? The monarchs are dead and their bones are left for the taking.”
Wernher paled and looked at the ground. “Sorry. I don’t know why I got angry.” He tried to smile. “Must have been that little brush with death back there.”
My fingertips brushed against the mirror shard.
Wernher stopped dead. “This is it!” There was not a little excitement in his voice as he pointed his light toward a black square on the ground. “This is the chest where our treasure has been kept.”
            He mumbled something to himself then fiddled with some rolling switches on the black square. It was amazing they still worked even after all these years.
            “It’s a very high quality safe,” Wernher explained. “That’s what they called these kinds of chests. They were built so no one could steal them or what was inside.”
            There was a click and Wernher stopped moving. He ran his fingers toward a small handle and pulled. At first nothing, and then part of the black square popped up from the floor and fell to the side on a hinge. In a flash, Wernher shone his light into the secret compartment. He gasped.

            “What is it?” I took a step closer and peered in, and the Sun blazed out at me.

Tuesday, May 5, 2015

Just a Taste: Ch. 3

This latest chapter focuses on a scene between Ellena and her mother, and the scene where Ellena first attempts to cook again in the kitchen. It's pretty short, but I didn't want to do more than these two scenes in a single chapter. Any comments/suggestions are welcome, I don't really have anything specific to ask about, except maybe if there are any parts that you feel need to be expanded upon within the context of the scenes?  I'm looking forward to this blog continuing on and becoming a sort of workshop forum for us all!


                                                                            Chapter 3

As I stepped inside the mudroom through the garage, I could hear my mother murmuring something to herself in the kitchen.  I sat down on the bench underneath the coat hooks to slip off my tennis shoes, straining my neck to listen and try to make out what my mother was saying.  After listening for a confused second more I realized she wasn’t speaking any sort of language I understood.
I came around the corner into the kitchen to find her sitting at the bar-top counter with her nose squinting two inches from the pages of a thick manual-looking book.  The cellphone she held close to her ear spoke in an automatic voice, “O zi buna.”
“O zi buna,” my mother repeated slowly, her brow crinkling deeper.
“Mom?”
“Oh, hi honey!” Her face relaxed into a smile. “Look, look, listen – o zi buna.  That means ‘have a nice day’ in Romanian.  Sounds wonderful, doesn’t it?” Before I could reply she dipped her nose back into the pages, her long dark hair spilling off over one shoulder.
I grabbed an apple from the bowl by the fridge and took a bite, “Why are you speaking Romanian?”
“I met this woman at the farmer’s market this morning, and she was selling these poppy seed pretzel things – called covrigi, I think – and, anyway, long story short, she moved here from Romania a long while ago, and I thought that was just so interesting.  I mean, you never really hear about Romania, do you?  So, voila!”  She lifted her phone and language book from the counter into the air in triumph.
“Ah. I see.” I took another bite of my apple and chewed.
“Come on, Ellena, I’m learning a useful skill.  Being bilingual is a desirable trait, you know.”
“That’s what you said about learning to fold origami and read astrological charts, too,” I said with a mouthful of apple.  She pursed her lips and opened her mouth like she was going to say something, but closed it and looked down at her book instead.
This is what my mom did now.  In the month since we’d had to close Augustine’s she’d picked up a new hobby every week or so.  First, there was origami.  “Something to do with my hands, keep busy,” she’d said.  Then, there was astrology, where I was greeted each morning with my horoscope for the day.  Where, each eye roll or complaint of a stomach ache would be dismissed as a conflicted moon in transit.  Or something like that.  Now, she was apparently on to speaking Romanian.  I knew she needed to fill her time without Augustine’s there to occupy her every hour, but it was like she was collecting them.  Like she was grasping desperately to the excitement of something new to forget what we all still really felt.  Though, after my experience with Quichey Keen today I couldn’t really fault her for that.
“Well, what were you doing all day?” my mom asked, thumbing through what I assumed was a language learning app on her phone.
“Um…actually I was covering Mable’s shift at that food truck she’s been working at.” I twisted at the stem of the apple core in my hands, looking up at in time to see my mother’s shoulders stiffen.
“Food truck?”
I took a quick, deep breath, “Yeah, it’s called Quichey Keen. They do breakfast/brunch type food. Get it?”
“Hmm.”  She didn’t look at me.  “That’s interesting.  You know, Mable’s stepdad was just telling me the other day that he could use some help down at the marina.  Maybe you should look into that?”
I wasn’t surprised at her aversion to my food truck encounter.  It’d been just as hard for her to face a kitchen after Dad.  I don’t think we’ve eaten anything at home but Chinese takeout and raw fruit and veggies, especially since Augustine’s closed and leftovers from each night were no longer filling our fridge.  But, it was different for her.  She’d never really been a cook, always more of a front-of-the-house manager type, but I knew the kitchen is where it was hardest to face that he was really gone.  So all I said was, “Yeah, maybe.”

That night I couldn’t sleep.  My mind kept tossing around what Coen had said about me maybe going back to work at Quichey Keen again.  The thought of returning to the chaos, the smell and sizzle of the stove, the constant bumping of elbows…to Coen’s scruffy jaw and wood smoke-scented flannel…made a heat swell in my chest and my heart beat faster.  I couldn’t decipher if it was out of anxiety or excitement.  Either way, there was no falling asleep.
After staring at the off-balance swaying of my ceiling fan for a solid ten minutes, I threw back my thin quilt and got out of bed.  Using the flashlight on my phone I rummaged through the clothes in my closet and drug out the plastic dollhouse, careful not to scrape against the wood floors too loudly.  Holding my phone between my teeth I unlatched the front of the house and retrieved my dad’s tattered recipe book.
I crept downstairs into the kitchen, sure avoid the noisy steps so I wouldn’t wake up my mom, with the recipe book hugged tight to my chest.  I wasn’t sure what I wanted to do, but I just felt like I had to be in the kitchen.  Even if I couldn’t get used to the thought of my dad not standing there beside me, I at least had his recipe book to sit on the counter next to me.
I aligned the open book with the edges of the stove and countertop, making sure no extra corners of pages were sticking out at risk to be burnt by the gas range.  I flipped to the last entry, the Spiced Chai Grits, that was left unmarked – its success seemingly undecided by my dad.   I ran my fingertip down the page, reading each ingredient and measurement carefully, feeling the indentations the pen had made pressing through the previous page.

Spiced Chai Grits
Ingredients:
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Kosher salt
Black pepper
8 chai tea bags
¼ teaspoon ground cinnamon
1 cup stone ground grits
½ cup heavy cream
1 teaspoon lemon zest
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I read the list over and over again before realizing my hands were white knuckled on the countertop’s edge.  I let go and shook out my hands on the way to the pantry.  Turning on the light, I surveyed the dusty shelves of products most likely expired in their neglect before gathering the grits recipe’s dry ingredients.  I dumped the arm full of items on the kitchen island across from the stove, then up-righted each one next to one another in a neat line.  I went to the fridge and pulled out a small carton of heavy cream, miraculously hanging on to the thread of its expiration date, and a small round lemon my mother had probably just picked up at the farmers market.  I set these in line with the rest of the ingredients, then stepped back to survey my selection.  I could do this.  Just measure out each part and boil some water, that’s really all there was to it, right?  I opened the bottom cabinet of the island and reached for a medium sized stainless steel pot.  I lifted it from its nest amongst the other cookware, felt its familiar yet strange weight in my palm.
The first time I remembered being in the kitchen with my dad I was too little to lift anything heavier than a wooden spoon. I would try to hand him pots and skillets my small self had retrieved from the depths of the cabinets, but my scrawny 4-year-old arms were no match for the weight of cast iron or steel.  He’d always let me attempt the hand-off, laugh at my scrunched, strained face, then pick me up and place me on his hip or the countertop before he got to work.  He’d joked that I would never be able to work a manual can opener or open a jar of artichoke hearts.  Proving him wrong years later would always be stand out moments of pride for me.
I filled the pot with the right amount of water from the sink faucet and placed it on the front right eye of the stove range.  I looked at it, looked at the knob that would kick on the gas flames, looked to the recipe book open beside me.  I felt the resolve within me crack, splintering from my chest and stomach out through my fingers and down into my ankles.  I picked up the pot again, walked it to the sink, and poured the water down the drain, placing it upside down on the drying rack.  I scooped up the ingredients on the island and put them back in their respective places in the pantry and fridge, one at a time.  I ran my hand over the open page of the recipe book. This was a good start, but Spice Chai Grits would have to wait a little longer.

Monday, April 20, 2015

Artist's Walk

For our final field trip, you are going to go on an Artist's Walk, reminiscent of Virginia Woolf's "A Street Haunting" (https://ebooks.adelaide.edu.au/w/woolf/virginia/w91d/chapter5.html)
and Eudora Welty's "A Worn Path" (http://xroads.virginia.edu/~drbr/ew_path.html)

Please read Woolf's essay on her walk through London on a winter evening, in search of a pen.

Some things to note and model:

  • Note how the "walk" begins with a particular purpose, in the same way that our short stories begin "in the middle of the action."
  • Pay attention to how characters are introduced (it's not all setting)
  • And note how those characters are revealed through action
  • Look at how she builds towards her conclusion--how the desire for a pen was about more than just a pen, it was about escape.
Then, read Welty's "A Worn Path," which is a short story.

  • Note how Welty establishes tension in the story, and how that tension grows as the story progresses
  • Again, note how character is created via action
Now that you've read and noted these things in Woolf's and Welty's work, TAKE A WALK.

I mean that kindly. Take a walk in Auburn. Many of you are coming close to the end of your time in this place. Why not stop and appreciate it a bit, while at the same time, produce what may be your favorite piece of writing this semester? Take a good, long walk, preferably somewhere where you're likely to see at least a few people. You might go out to the arboretum, or the museum, the mall, downtown, even campus. But unlike other times when you've walked around town, PAY ATTENTION. Let it all be fodder for your imagination.

Then, write a 3-4 page series of scenes in which a character you've created takes a walk in Auburn for a set purpose, and learns something about him or herself, or someone else, along the way. Try to model some of the techniques used by Woolf and Welty.

As usual, you're doing this field trip in lieu of class on April 23rd. Please bring in your Artist's Walk on Tuesday, April 28th.

Monday, March 9, 2015

Just a Taste: Chapter 2

Author's Note:
        First, I made a couple changes in the first chapter that will make some parts of this chapter more clear. I added a new scene as the opening scene, where Ellena is picking Mable up from work at the food truck, so the reader gets the feature of the food truck right away. Ellena has an awkward little encounter with one of the food truck workers, and that's the Frisbee incident mentioned in this following chapter. It's not all that important, but just letting you know for clarity sake. I'm also adding in a scene before Ellena decides to take the shift at the food truck where she goes into her kitchen at home and toys with the idea of actually cooking. 
       For this second chapter, the focus is Ellena's first experience working at the food truck. Ultimately, I'd like to know if y'all are happy with the amount of description, or if you are having trouble imagining things. Should I amp up the chaotic factor? Do you get enough of the food truck staff characters or should they have more interaction/dialogue? This was such a tough scene to write because there were a lot of visual details, logistical details, and emotional details all going on at the same time.  As for emotions, does Ellena seem to be appropriately reacting to being in this environment again? Ultimately, what's working for y'all and what's not, because this chapter is super key to setting up so much of the rest of the book!


Chapter 2
            A couple days later on Saturday morning, I pulled up into the dirt-worn, grassy parking lot next to Quichey Keen.  The food truck stood on the fringes of the community park downtown, near the baseball diamonds.  The metal serving window was closed up, the slightly faded image of a steaming white coffee mug with the truck’s block-letter logo spread across the left side.  Even from inside my car I could hear music thumping from the burnt orange-colored truck.  Nervousness tingled in my stomach as I rubbed my lip-balmed lips together, retying my high ponytail for the fourth time.  I still wasn’t sure this was a good idea, if I was ready to be in a kitchen that wasn’t shrouded by the late night darkness of my home.  I looked at the truck through the windshield once more, not having any idea what awaited me inside, before finally getting out of the car. 
            Mable had been stingy with the details, only telling me to “dress casual” because she didn’t want to “spoil the surprise.” As if that was comforting or informative at all.  I looked at my reflection in the side of my car, smoothing the creases in my loose black khaki shorts and plain white t-shirt and trying not to think about how horrified my dad would have been that I wasn’t wearing long pants in a kitchen. The sound of a metal door slamming open jerked my attention from my reflection.
            “Seriously, y’all, I didn’t burn it! Brooke’s the one on coffee duty today, not me.”  I recognized Henry, the weird Frisbee guy, as he stormed out of the truck and down the few rickety wooden steps leading up to the truck’s entrance.  He was wearing the same “I’m the cheese” shirt, and had a half-full coffee pot in one hand and his round headphones in the other.  A muffled shouting came from inside the truck, and Henry proceeded to slosh out the, apparently, burned coffee onto the grass next to my car, barely missing my ankles.
            “Oh, sorry, didn’t see you.” Henry lifted his chin and squinted at me.  “Hey, weren’t you here the other day?  Picking up Mable?”
            I shifted my weight, eyeing the pool of coffee slithering across the grass. “Um, yeah, that was me.  I’m taking her shift today, actually.”
            “Whose?”
            “Mable’s…”
            “Oh, okay.  Does Coen know?”
            “I think so? Who is that?” I couldn’t remember who Mable told me I was supposed to talk to once I got here.  Henry stood looking at me and then turned and stepped back into the food truck, much like the strange Frisbee experience from the other day.  This time I followed him, careful to avoid the puddle of coffee in my path.
            As soon as I stepped into the narrow doorway, I was hit with the familiar scent of coffee grounds and bacon grease I’d smelled on Mable, along with fried egg, pancake batter, and, oddly, curry.  Then there was the heat.  It was like all the humidity in Virginia had been sucked up and spit out in this food truck, churned around by wafts of heat from opening ovens.  I had no idea how anyone could breathe properly when the door and serving window were shut.  Once my mind and lungs wrapped around the heat, I finally noticed the actual insanity happening in front of me.  The roughly 15x7 kitchen was a blur of motion.  A thin girl with too-short cut-offs and a bad ombre dye job that looked like she’d somehow dipped the lower half of her head in peroxide was mixing batter with furious circular strokes in an industrial sized mixing bowl.  Behind her, a lanky guy with intricate sleeve tattoos on both arms and long hair scooped up into a bun was chopping assorted vegetables and piling them into impressive mounds on the stainless steel counter.  Henry stood next to Man-Bun, grinding coffee grounds to the beat of the still-thumping techno-meets-reggae music.  The ultimate sense of chaos came from the guy standing across the kitchen by the driving cabin, who was shouting out orders rapid fire from a notebook over the cacophony of mixing, chopping, grinding, and thumping. 
            “I need at least two more ham and spinach quiches in the oven before we open up, guys.  Brooke, that better be enough batter to cover the waffle sandwiches, too, okay?  Today’s special is gonna be the Tofu Curry Scramble Burrito, so be prepared to explain to people what’s all in it.  And Henry, for the love of God, will you calm it down with the coffee grinding over there?” Despite the lack of response to his questions and demands, it was clear everyone had understood their tasks.  He scanned his notebook once more and gave a tight nod before wiping his brow on his flannel shirt sleeve.  I had no idea how he could stand to wear flannel without sweltering to death, but his grey chino shorts must have compensated.  He had sandy brown hair shaved shorter on the sides and a normal length on top, the kind of edgy look you would see more in Portland than Alexandria.
            Everything about this kitchen felt at once so familiar and so foreign.  The shouting orders, intoxicating mix of smells, and general fast-paced whir of cooking were all elements I grew up with, and loved, at Augustine’s.  I could almost hear my dad bellowing out the number of fish and steak orders for the first round of dinner guests, which in his kitchen would have been promptly received with a “Yes, chef!” from the staff.  Here, though, was not Augustine’s.  The music was so loud, the kitchen was barely big enough to accommodate four people, let alone five if I ever made it past the threshold, and the space seemed to completely lack any organization at all.  Processing what was in front of me, I took a deep breath and swallowed hard.  I could do this.
            Then, finally, the guy who had been giving orders noticed my presence.  His face twisted in confusion, which lead me to believe neither Mable nor Henry had alerted him to my arrival.  The nervous tingle took over my stomach again. 
            “Who are you?” He shouted across the kitchen.
            “I’m—,” my voice cracked, “I’m Ellena, Mable’s friend? I’m covering her shift for her today.” I craned my neck over the people between us, silently cursing Mable for obviously forgetting to clue her workplace in to her change of plans.
            The guy looked down and shook his head before turning and passing through into the driving cabin.  I bit the inside of my cheek and remained standing frozen in the doorway, confused as to where he disappeared to.
            “Well, I guess you’ll be getting the crash course this morning.” I jumped and spun around to find him standing behind me at the bottom of the wooden stoop. “We open at 9:00, so you’ve got about five minutes to figure this joint out.  You can thank Mable for that.” His teeth clenched, emphasizing his jawline. Up closer, I was surprised how young he looked, only a couple years older than me at most.
            “Sorry, Mable can be a little all over the place.” I let out a nervous laugh and popped the hair-tie on my wrist. “But, I’m happy to help out.”
            “All right then. Well, I’m Coen.  Nice to meet you…”
            “Ellena.”
            “Right.  Ellena.  What’s your experience? Know how to cook?” Coen started up the few stairs to meet me in the doorway.  I found myself shaking my head, no.  No, I wasn’t ready yet. No, they didn’t need to know that I probably had more culinary skill than all of them combined. No, just being here was already almost too much to handle.
            “Well, hey, that’s all right. We can always use another dish washer,” Coen winked.  As he passed me through the doorway, I caught a whiff of wood smoke.
            I made my way to the deep stainless steel sink on the other side of the girl, who I assumed must have been Brooke, and who was still stirring the gallons of waffle and pancake batter with such tenacity she didn’t seem to register my existence.  The sink was already full of various sauce pans, baking tins, and utensils.  I hadn’t been delegated to dishwashing since I was 11, when my dad decided I’d reached the appropriate age to be his “apprentice.”  But now, I welcomed the sight of burnt oil and caked on crust.  This was something I could do just fine.
            “Okay, let’s crank her up guys!” Coen started tugging on a chain hanging on the wall behind me and the serving window began to roll open like a garage door.  A line of about five people had already formed outside. “Here, you’ll need this.” Coen tossed me a navy apron with the Quichey Keen logo screen printed in orange on the front. “Make sure you keep up the pace and you’ll be fine.  Have fun!” Coen flashed a smile before ducking out of the driver’s cabin door and into the small crowd of customers, handing out menus and wishing them good morning.
            I turned to look at the other trucker staffers.  Man-Bun was now filling quiche tins with his chopped veggies with the same quiet concentration as Brooke with the batter.  It seemed a little strange to take food truck food preparation so seriously.  Henry saw me staring and gave a stern salute before abandoning his coffee post to flip the pieces of bacon on the oven range.  I gave a little smile and turned back to my own work, grabbing the sponge and dish soap.

            The rest of the morning was even more hectic then I could have imagined.  The flurry of orders and quick turn-around time for dishes was impressively fast compared to what I was used to.  I didn’t know how Brooke and Man-Bun, whose name I learned is Asher, kept up, especially since I hadn’t been able to work out any sort of ticket system for keeping orders straight.  It was like they had sponges for brains, absorbing every word Henry called out from the service bar.  And I felt like I had sponges for hands after three straight hours of scrubbing pan after bowl after pan, as well as all the flatware and plates and bowls used by customers “eating in.”  Apparently Quichey Keen promoted a “green standard” that tried to minimize the paper and plastic throw-away serving products by encouraging customers to stay and eat at one of the few picnic tables in the surrounding area.  Which also meant my fingertips were prunes and my shirt was almost entirely soaked through with soapy water and sweat.  I was more than thankful for the apron covering up my white, now see-through, t-shirt.
            Once it hit the noon mark, things began to die down.  Quichey Keen’s breakfast/brunch themed menu catered mainly to morning joggers, commuters, and dog-walkers, and only stayed open later than 3:00pm for special catered events.  So by 12:30pm, everyone in the truck was able to take a break.
            “Whoo!  I am so never making pancakes again.” Brooke slapped a hand towel against the counter. She’d finally loosened her concentration once the batter was mixed and could start flipping pancakes in rhythm with the music that still thumped even after opening up for service.  Her only mishap was at the fault of Henry who tried to jump in with his Frisbee in order to reattempt his flipping technique. Needless to say, Brooke was furious when several ladles of batter ended up on the rubber floor mats. 
            “You say that every day, but then you don’t like the way any of us make them,” Asher said into his chest, his head tilted upside down to re-pile his man-bun.  Brooke didn’t respond, too interested in filing her acrylic French manicure. 
            “She says that every day because she knows she’s the pancake-master and just wants us to beg her to keep making them.” Coen nudged her with his elbow.  He’d spent almost the entire morning outside the truck acting as a sort of informal host, and passing back customer compliments and complaints. (Apparently it’s possible for eggs to taste too “eggy.”)
            Coen opened the fridge and pulled out a jug of chocolate milk, taking a giant swig before passing it to Asher.  “So, you’ve been real quiet.” Coen raised his eyebrows at me with a smile.
            “Oh, you know, I’m just taking it all in.” I looked at my grey sneakers with neon orange laces.  I didn’t know why I was feeling so sheepish since my initial nervousness had faded away with the safe and methodical assignment of dish washing. “I’m not sure my hands will ever un-prune, though.” I held up my wrinkled fingers for them to see.
            “Oh, just go stand in the sun for about four seconds, you’ll dry out quick.” Asher offered me the chocolate milk jug before heading out the side door, Brooke following.  Asher handed off the jug to Henry sitting at one of the picnic tables, bobbing his head to whatever was playing in his headphones.
            “It’s all right, working in a kitchen isn’t for everyone, especially working in a portable one.” I blushed at Coen’s remark.  If only he knew how comfortable in a kitchen I used to be. “But, you know what, things will be pretty slow the rest of the day if you want to take off.  There won’t be much washing to do from here out today.” My stomach dropped as I realized I didn’t want to leave yet. Not after finally getting used to being in this environment, however different from my old norm, again. “But you can keep the apron as a souvenir.  Unless you’d want to come back.” Coen smoothed the longer middle section of his hair back.
            My heart skipped thinking about returning. I just thought it would be a one-time deal. “I don’t know, y’all are pretty cramped already so I don’t know if there’d really be room with Mable here, too,” I shrugged.  “This was fun, though, I’m glad I got to be back…here for Mable.”  I almost let slip I’d been in a kitchen before.
            “Just think about it.  You never know, Mable might need another shift replacement.” He rolled his eyes and laughed.
            I didn’t know how I really felt about working more at Quichey Keen.  The chaos had been exciting for a few hours, but what if they found out I’d lied about my cooking experience?  Would they force me to cook? What if Mable tells them during her next shift? The nervous tingle sprung up in my stomach again. “Okay, I’ll think about it.”



            

Sunday, March 8, 2015

Chapter 2ish

Author's Note:

Hey guys! I tried working on several things with this section, mainly involving characterization, relationships between different characters and voice. My main concern is how the Spanish and English flow together, so if something doesn't make sense or gets annoying regarding Spanglish please let me know. I included more scenes with Olivia so hopefully y'all can get a better sense of who she is and how she interacts with others. I also included more of Abuela Linda and introduced Axel. I tend to struggle a lot when it comes to "emotional" scenes and I try really hard not to make them sappy and overly dramatic. That said, if at any point it feels like you're reading the print version of The Bachelor or Bachelorette please let me know so that I can either quit life as a writer or make the necessary edits. All criticism is welcome and encouraged!
Enjoy!

Chapter 3
            “Oli, you should go outside and get some air,” says Abuela Linda.
I’ve been in my room reading and occasionally sticking my finger in the fish tank that’s sitting on my bedside table. The small blue fish rushes to the surface to nibble on my fingertip every time. It kind of tickles.   
            “I’m busy,” I say as I tuck my dark brown curls behind my ear. From the corner of my eye I can see Abue’s light flickering, annoyed. I sigh and put my book down, turning to look at her.
            “You can read outside,” she says floating closer to me.
            “Yeah, but I can also read inside,” I reply as I look back down at my book. I grab it and grandma drifts towards my nightstand.  
She hovers over the small fishbowl before darting across my room and disappearing through my window. I sigh, putting my book back down. I look at the pathetic little fish floating in its bowl. Its fins are moving but it remains in the same place, close to the surface. I get up, put on some flip-flops, and grab my purse that’s hanging from my desk chair. I’m walking out of my room when I stop to grab my phone that’s sitting next to the tank. I slide my phone in my pocket and I’ve already reached my door when I double back and grab the fish tank, closing the door behind me.
***
            “You can’t tell Mom,” I say to Abuela Linda.
We’re sitting in my small yellow car waiting for the order of fries and the sundae that I just ordered. Abuela Linda is glowing excitedly from the center console. She loves car rides. I look down at the passenger leg space where the fish tank is sitting. The water is sloshing along the smooth edges of the tank, fighting the Saran wrap that I tightly placed over the tank’s mouth to prevent water from spilling all over my car.
I finally get my order, but not without having the cashier give me a funny look after spotting my fishy passenger. I place the fries and sundae in my cup holder before driving off.
¿A donde vamos?” asks Abuela Linda.
“I don’t really know,” I say as I grab a fry and dip it in the sundae.
I’ve worked my way through half of the order of fries when I realize that I’ve been driving without paying much attention at all to where I’m going.
“I think we’re lost,” I tell Abuela Linda. We’ve been driving on small back roads and forgotten highways across the Sonoran Desert for about forty minutes.
“Ay, mi hija.”
“You didn’t say anything so I thought you knew where we were,” I say.
We drive a few more miles into the desert before I decide to make a U turn. We drive without talking for a while, the radio playing softly in the background as the desert sand and vegetation stream by.  
“I’m sorry about Capri,” she says, breaking the silence.
I nod my head and keep strumming my fingers against the steering wheel as we drive along.
“It must be hard. Not having your friend while others like me get to Splinter and—“
“Abuela, por favor.”
“I’m just saying—“
I reach over and crank the music as loud as I can, trying to block her voice from my head.
“Olivia, stop.”
I see her light glow before it dissolves in the air, leaving a wispy trail behind.

I don’t know how long I’ve been driving but my leftover sundae is completely melted and the remaining fries are cold and soggy. The beautiful desert light continues to stream in through my car windows, like those old movie projectors. I glance down at the fast food scraps and at the lapping fish water and that’s when I feel the itch behind my eyes. The one that makes them water. I blink madly, trying to scare the tears away, gripping the steering wheel tightly.
“Capri?” I ask in my head. 
I wait, holding my breath.
I finally breathe in again, the back of my eyes stinging.
“Capri?” I ask out loud.     
I wait, holding in my breath.
Nothing.
***
“Cementerio Viejo Paraiso” reads the green exit sign. I take a deep breath before switching on my blinker and getting on Exit 36. I follow the weathered signs until I reach the wrought iron archway that marks the entrance to the cemetery. Since I was last here several weeks ago both metallic A’s have been stolen from the large lettering. I make my way into the cemetery, following the winding gravel road until I reach the parking lot. I   park the small yellow car and unbuckle my seatbelt. I take a deep breath before getting out of the car and walking over to the passenger seat, bending down to grab the fish tank and precariously placing it on the yellow roof. I grab the leftover fries and sundae and shut the car door. I grab the fish tank off the car and tuck it under my free arm before making my way to Capri’s barren grave.
It is very fitting, and depressing, that the Lost’s final resting place is itself lost. I’m the only one walking down one of several narrow cobblestone pathways, passing row after row of headstones and plaques scattered on the desert sand. I hobble along, fish and food in tow until I get to the rows designated for last names starting with R. I go down the path until I find Gloria Ramos’ grave. A few lots from hers I find Capri. I stop on my tracks, facing the small bronze plaque.
Capri Ramos
May 16, 1998-June 8, 2015
~
            That’s it.
Just a name and a date.
I take a deep breath before kneeling down in front of the plaque, putting the fish and the soggy food on either side of it.
I sit there, not entirely sure of what to do now. I have never done this before, or heard of anyone visiting someone here.
I remove the Saran wrap from the fish tank and stick my pinky finger in. The blue fish rises to the surface, nibbling on my finger.
“Háblale, mi hija.” Talk to her.
Abuela Linda’s voice takes me by surprise and I jump, nearly knocking over the melted sundae.
“Abuela!” I yell surprised, balancing the sundae and preventing a sweet disaster from taking place.
“Talk to her, Oli.”
“How?” I ask, turning to look at the glowing orb.
“Like this,” she says.
“Its not the same, she’s—“
“Ignore it, just talk to her.”
Before I can come up with a remark she has dissolved into thin air.
I look back at the sad inscription on the ground before me. I clear my throat and stick my pinky back in the fish tank.
“Capri?” I ask out loud.   
Nothing.
I clear my throat again.
“I don’t know if you can hear me, but its me, Oli.”
I can’t help but feel like an idiot talking to a sheet of metal. I stop talking and look back at the little fish. It has stopped nibbling on my finger and has gone back to floating in place.
“Charlotte got me a fish to replace you,” I say as I swirl my pinky in the fish water. “Loca, right?” I pull my finger out of the water and dry it on my shorts. “I haven’t named it yet,” I say. I point at the sad blue fish and tap the glass. It doesn’t budge. “I saved you fries and sundae…Sort of.”
***
The longer I talked the easier it got. I told Capri about my uneventful summer ever since she’s died. Her Lost Ceremony and Laura’s ugly dress. I told her about visiting The Nest, what’s left of it. How Maurice Fink gave me a ride home. I tried telling her about that night, when I heard the sirens.
The sun’s starting to go down and the desert wind’s picking up, tiny sand grains hitting my bare legs like miniature bullets. I readjust the plastic wrap on the fish tank and carry it back to my yellow car. I left the fries and sundae for Capri. I don’t know if that’s technically considered littering, but its too late now. I make it to my car and I’m bending over, placing the fish on the passenger side, when I hear someone clear their throat behind me. For the second time today I jolt, slamming my head into the car’s doorframe.
“Coño!” I cuss as I clutch my throbbing head.
“Someone’s got a sailor’s mouth,” I hear someone say behind me. The voice is rugged and gravelly sounding. The voice of a chain smoker.   
I turn back, ready to give a piece of my mind to whoever is creeping on me at the damn Vejestorio and I see its Axel Rivera.
Axel and I have been going to school together since I moved here. His family has probably been here just as long as Capri’s. Unlike the Ramos though, the Riveras are known for all the bad things. Theft and drugs being some of the items on their long family record.
Axel is tall and fit, but I wouldn’t describe him as muscular. He has tan, caramel skin and short dark hair that matches his dark eyes. He has soft facial features that reveal his age.
“What are you doing here?” I ask, still rubbing my head.
“I work here, güera.
“Ugh, don’t call me that. I’m not blonde,” I say as I shift my weight from one foot to the other and run my hand through my brown curls.
“Close enough, Blondie.”
“What’s your job anyway?”
“Security,” he says as he sticks his hands in his jean pockets.
“Well you haven’t been doing a very good job,” I say as I point down the road at the archway with the missing letters.
“Whatever. No one ever comes out here anyway.”
For some reason this strikes a chord and I’m tempted to jump in my small car and run him over.  I cross my arms over my chest and look back at the barren cemetery.
“Well, maybe someone ought to care.”
I turn back towards my car, ready to go home. I reach the driver’s door and I climb in, buckling my seatbelt. I’m about to close my car door when I notice Axel has moved and is standing a few feet away from my door.
“Olivia,” he says leaning towards me.
I clamp my fingers around the steering wheel, anticipating the awful “I’m sorry” and pity smile combo.
“Is that a fish?” he asks.
I’m surprised by his question and it takes me a few seconds to process what he’s actually saying. He knits his eyebrows together and points at the fish tank sitting on the floor of my passenger seat. I follow his finger to the tank, the question finally making sense.
“Yeah,” I say, trying to act like toting a fish around like a purse is perfectly normal.
“Cool,” he says as he straightens himself back up. “What’s its name?”
“Spud,” I say as I shut my car door. I crank my car and Axel steps back, sticking his hands back in his pockets. I back out of the spot and drive towards the winding gravel road that leads to the archway. As I speed off I look in my rearview mirror and see Axel still standing there, and arm waving me away.

Chapter 4
I’m sitting on a beach towel, doodling in a notebook while listening to music. Whenever the breeze picks up it hammers desert sand against my skin and the cemetery plaques, making a sound similar to rain. For the third time this week I’m sitting in front of Capri’s grave eating French fries and a sundae while Spud floats in his tank. I’ve been sketching a drawing of the small beta fish for over 20 minutes now and its finally coming to life. Unlike what has become the typical Spud pose I have captured this fish swimming, its long fins and tail swelling with the movement of water like parachutes. The wind and sand rattle the pages of my notebook, so I take a break and close it, waiting for the wind to come down.  I trace my index finger over the raised engraving of Capri’s plaque, spelling her name with my finger.
The name Capri was selected as a sort of inside joke between her parents. Whenever Mrs. Ramos discovered that she was pregnant again her and Mr. Ramos decided that this would be their last child. They then agreed to spoil her rotten and joked about all the wondrous things they would do for their new daughter. At some point Capri’s father said that they were setting themselves up to raise the ultimate caprichosa. Capricious. They joked of their newest daughter being a temperamental, unreasonable, and impulsive brat. Soon they shortened it to Capri and it stuck. This was one of Capri’s favorite stories to tell. It was also one that I had probably heard over a dozen times since teachers and classmates where usually curious of the origin of her rare name.
I trace over Capri’s name a few more times before deciding to pack up and call it a day. The wind doesn’t seem to be coming down and I’m getting a thorough exfoliation from being brushed by the drifting sand. I leave the remaining sundae and fries and take the rest of my stuff to my car. I’m walking down the pathway that leads to the parking lot when I see Axel sitting on the vibrant hood of my car.
“Hey, Blondie.” He’s smoking a skinny cigarette, the picture of not having a care in the world.
“I refuse to respond to that,” I say as I make my way around to the passenger seat, now officially Spud’s seat. I place him on the floor of the car and close the door, making my way to the driver’s seat.
“Isn’t that technically a response?” He asks, taking a drag and knitting his eyebrows together.
I stop at my car door, glare at him, and proceed to hop in. I close the door after me and I buckle up and crank the engine. I’m surprised to see that Axel hasn’t budged and is calmly smoking away. I give him a second and when I see that he hasn’t made an attempt to move I press the horn lightly.
He doesn’t even flinch.
I lay on my horn.
Nothing.
I sigh and roll my window down.
“Would you mind?” I say, sticking my head out the window and pointing at his butt.
“Where are you going?” he asks, taking another drag.
“Why do you care?” I retort.
“I asked first, Blondie.”
“Its non of your business!” I say, getting more irritated by the minute.
“Fine,” he says as he turns back to look ahead of him, “suit yourself.”
He takes one last drag from his cigarette before dropping it on the sand floor. I give him a minute to stand up but he’s still sitting on my hood.
I lay on my horn one last time.
Nothing.
I shift my car to reverse and start backing up. Axel looks back at me, smiles, and brings his feet up, resting them on my front bumper while grabbing on to my windshield wipers. I step on the accelerator a little harder but he’s grabbing on tight. I finally give up and brake, shifting my car back to park. I sigh and poke my head out my window again.
“What do you want?” I ask.
“Just answer one question and I’ll hop off and let you go wherever it is you’re going,” he says, turning to smile back at me.
“Fine. Ask your stupid question.”

“What do you think happened to Capri?”